I would love to hear your music one day Connie!
And you're not bending my ear at all. I love to chat with other writers about anything and everything and about process and ideas. I'm learning a lot from you and some of the other amazing writers on here. You're all giving me new ways to work and new things to try. Your works in particular push me to try and be more lyrical, to really listen to the sounds in words and the beats of a sentence.
I'm think your instinct about the stanzas was a great one and I liked the repetition of certain lines, which now you've said about this being your song lyrics, i can understand has the feel almost of a chorus. Bend my ear any day :)